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根据标题，阐述三部分内容：一、对原英语稿修改后的成文；二、原英语稿；三、对原英语稿修改及其分析和理由叙述。
一、对原英语稿修改后的成文。
①In recent years, along with the advances towards the Internet Technology comes the great achievement constituted either by constructively using or drawing on educationally-digital resources.
②This turns quite a few universities absolutely vital for having courses taught by their teachers through internet technology in terms of digital technique, which has been regarded as being a “platform”, as teachers shared with students, that has been set in universities.
③Modernization for the teaching of course in use of digital technique has the advantage over tradition/convention, for comparison.
④Its fact comes to that the teaching of course by way of digital technique is made available for its adequate resource to be shared globally.
⑤This helps a learner take a course both anytime and anywhere, by being at virtual-reality school through digital education, according to his/her own of schedule.
⑥The above shows that people find it really possible for them to be provided with education they had received not just for once but for twice or three times…etc., enabling them to acquire up-to-date knowledge for life.
二、原英语稿
In recent years along with the advances of the Internet Technology comes the great achievement in the construction of our educational digital resources. With its platform built in a few universities digitalized teaching is playing a more and more vital role in education. Compared with conventional methods of teaching, the way of digitalized teaching have considerable advantages. On the one handit makes teaching resources globally available. On the other hand it extends the time and space in which learners can learn. People can reach digitalized virtual schools via Internet at any time and in any place, which makes humankind's evolution from one-shot education to lifelong learning possible.
三、对原英语稿修改及其分析和理由叙述
为了修改方便，把原英语文中句子，加了编号
①In recent years, along with the advances of on/towards the Internet Technology comes the great achievement constituted either by constructively drawing on or using educationally-digital resources in the construction of our educational digital resources.
修改理由：advances之后跟带介词是on/towards不是of ；不是建设资源（in the construction of our educational digital resources）而是利用资源（drawing on or using educationally-digital resources）；是achievement constituted either by constructively drawing不是achievement in the construction of our educational digital resources
②With its platform built in a few universities, digitalized teaching is playing a more and more vital role in education. This turns quite a few universities absolutely vital for having courses taught by their teachers through internet technology in terms of digital technique, which has been regarded as being a “platform”, as teachers shared with students, that has been set in universities.
修改理由：应加逗号，（universities, digitalized teaching）；重点/主要内容先说This turns quite a few universities absolutely vital for having courses taught by their teachers through internet technology in terms of digital technique,次要内容后说which has been regarded as being a “platform”, as teachers shared with students, that has been set in universities.
③Compared with conventional methods of teaching, the way of digitalized teaching have considerable advantages. Modernization for the teaching of course in use of digital technique has the advantage over tradition/convention, for comparison.
修改理由：甲优于乙英语表达是A has a advantage over B. 所以较好英语表达是Modernization for the teaching of course in use of digital technique has the advantage over tradition/convention, for comparison. 最后把“相对而言而”的中文,用 for comparison表达较好；“Compared with conventional methods of teaching, the way of digitalized teaching have considerable advantages. ”则是中文思维的结果。
④On the one hand it makes teaching resources globally available. Its fact comes to that the teaching of course by way of digital technique is made available for its adequate resource to be shared globally.
修改理由：英语是逻辑思维语言，不是模板语言，逻辑是英语的灵魂。所以去掉模板词语On the one hand代之为逻辑承上启下的句子Its fact comes to that…; 中文的“教学资源”生硬译文teaching resources实际上按照“内容·逻辑·语法”的三位一体表达应该是the teaching of course is made available for its adequate resource to be shared globally。
⑤On the other hand it extends the time and space in which learners can learn. This helps a learner take a course both anytime and anywhere by being at virtual-reality school through digital education, according to his/her own of schedule.
修改理由：同理去掉模板词语On the other hand代之为逻辑承上启下的句子This helps a learner take a course…“拓展学习者学习的时间和空间”是中文非常好词语，一旦直译英文extends the time and space英文读者不免有疑问了。为避免疑问，表达英语take a course both anytime and anywhere，by being at virtual-reality school through digital education, according to his/her own of schedule. ；…the time and space in which learners can learn.之意是学习者在时间和空间里学习，实际给英语读者出了一个难题：“在时间和空间里学习”是什么呢？这显然是没有脱离中文写英文的结果。为了解决此难题，译者实际上可以说“…能在任何时间、任何地点上课…（…take a course both anytime and anywhere…）”就OK了，再加上“数字虚拟学校学习（being at virtual-reality school through digital education）”，也可加上“根据自己的计划学习（according to his/her own of schedule.）”，尽管原中文无此文字而要添加上，正是出于与“…能在任何时间、任何地点上课…”相呼应而加上在英语逻辑思维表达为妥当。
⑥People can reach digitalized virtual schools via Internet at any time and in any place, which makes humankind's evolution from one-shot education to lifelong learning possible.
The above shows that people find it really possible for them to be provided with education they had received not just for once but for twice or three times…etc., enabling them to acquire up-to-date knowledge for life.
修改理由：“People can reach digitalized virtual schools via Internet at any time and in any place, ”合并于⑤句中；which makes humankind's evolution from one-shot education to lifelong learning possible.此英语是依据“这使得人类从接受一次性教育走向终生学习成为可能。”中文的直译，是非常“头重脚轻”的，这是英语要避免的。为此中外都能理解的意思就是“使得人们终生都能学习到现代的知识（The above shows that people find it really possible for them to be provided with education they had received not just for once but for twice or three times…etc., enabling them to acquire up-to-date knowledge for life.）”
加上编号的原英语稿附下
①In recent years along with the advances of the Internet Technology comes the great achievement in the construction of our educational digital resources. ②With its platform built in a few universities digitalized teaching is playing a more and more vital role in education. ③Compared with conventional methods of teaching, the way of digitalized teaching have considerable advantages. ④On the one handit makes teaching resources globally available. ⑤On the other hand it extends the time and space in which learners can learn. ⑥People can reach digitalized virtual schools via Internet at any time and in any place, which makes humankind's evolution from one-shot education to lifelong learning possible.
原英语文这篇英文写作看上去似乎是借助某种工具来完成的，不象是人工写出来的。之所以这么说是因为中文思维及其模板痕迹重重的，所以判卷老师就降档次扣分数了，可能不会给高分了（也就不在于给你修改多少次了）。你要知道：“英语是逻辑语言，不是模板语言，逻辑是英语的灵魂”的原理。
修改原英语稿之后的英语逻辑思维英语作文成文附下
①In recent years, along with the advances towards the Internet Technology comes the great achievement constituted either by constructively using or drawing on educationally-digital resources.
②This turns quite a few universities absolutely vital for having courses taught by their teachers through internet technology in terms of digital technique, which has been regarded as being a “platform”, as teachers shared with students, that has been set in universities.
③Modernization for the teaching of course in use of digital technique has the advantage over tradition/convention, for comparison.
④Its fact comes to that the teaching of course by way of digital technique is made available for its adequate resource to be shared globally.
⑤This helps a learner take a course both anytime and anywhere, by being at virtual-reality school through digital education, according to his/her own of schedule.
⑥The above shows that people find it really possible for them to be provided with education they had received not just for once but for twice or three times…etc., enabling them to acquire up-to-date knowledge for life.
总结：
不管是翻译英语还是写英语，都要使用“原因句+提示句+结果句”方法——内容、思维、逻辑和语法“四位一体”，具体有四种思维方法，即：①一因一果；②一因多果；③多因一果；④多因多果。
学生可以参考我的“个人主页”的文章栏目的英语逻辑思维写作英语作文成文的系列文章，及其写作原理。使你了解用英语逻辑思维法，写作英语作文得高分，有此需求请私信。